geoviki: (dsot - Harry and Draco - by Ravurian)
geoviki ([personal profile] geoviki) wrote2006-02-11 07:58 pm

DSOT: remember that?

I was going through some files on my hard drive and came across the original ending to Delicate Sound of Thunder, which I cut upon recommendation from my betas because the tone didn't mesh with the scene before it. But after all this time, I'm sure to be fortunate if any of you even remember the basic plot at all, let alone the nuances of tone, so here it is.




Tonight when I chase the dragon,
The water may change to cherry wine,
And the silver will turn to gold.


Time out of Mind - Steely Dan

Draco's meeting with the Ministry minions ran later than expected, so he was surprised that Harry wasn't waiting in Redmund's entrance hall as they'd planned. He was disappointed – he wanted to share his high spirits now that his settlement was finally signed, sealed, and all-but-delivered, and he'd expected Harry to be waiting to celebrate with him.

He pushed open the door and paused on the steps leading down to Diagon Alley, glancing around once more for Harry. No sign of him. A young woman perched on the wide ledge flanking the steps, however, was eyeing him rather blatantly. Not wanting to encourage her, he avoided her bold stare. He'd have to drop a word to Redmund that tarts were apparently practicing trade outside his very door.

"Got the time?" she called out, with a showy toss of her hair.

"Four thirty," he answered shortly. Where the hell was Harry?

"That's not what I meant, darling," she practically purred. Her skirt rode up to dangerous heights as she slid off the ledge, and she tugged at it briefly before flashing him a sinful smile.

"Look," he began, backing away warily. "I'm waiting for someone, so don't—"

"What a coincidence! I'm waiting for someone, too." She practically draped herself on his neck. "Someone exactly like you, as a matter of fact. Wouldn't you like to fuck me into the nearest mattress? I'd love that! I bet you're an animal between the sheets."

He was reaching for his wand in alarm when she nuzzled against his cheek and laughed. Suddenly, something seemed all too familiar about that laugh, and Draco took a step back in sheer astonishment.

"Harry?"

It was Harry; Draco could see it clearly now, could smell the tangy soap that Harry favored.

"You were expecting someone else?" Harry said, with a wicked smirk.

"Damn, Harry, that's one hell of a disguise. What were you thinking?"

"How you suggested we use glamours more often when we were in Diagon Alley. But to tell you the truth, I was expecting David Carmichael."

"Shit, I— I forgot." He remembered why he'd been so lost in thought coming out of Redmund's offices and beamed at Harry. "The Ministry signed! It's all over."

Harry's grin was infectious, and his enthusiastic kiss left Draco a bit weak-kneed. "Brilliant!"

"You should have been there, Harry. Redmund walked all over them. Well, with Carr out of the picture and Macumber on the Auror shit list after last night's fiasco, the Ministry team wasn't exactly up to scratch. The suits they did send over must have been ordered to play nice. Granger was probably the only one there with any credibility, and she wasn't supporting the Ministry's interests too stringently."

"What's happened to Carr?"

"No one was saying exactly. But since there's not been a whisper of last night's events in the Prophet today, I'm guessing cover-up. Everyone with any knowledge of Carr is scrambling to deny it before the cock crows three times."

"Damn them—"

"Don't look so disgusted, Harry, it ruins your looks. Let's face it, A.W.L. doesn't want to throw the baby out with the bathwater. A scandal might cause the Ministry to take a closer look at what they're up to. They don't want that. Hell, I don't want that, and neither should you."

"What? Why not?"

"Because you and I benefit the most from their vendetta against Death Eaters. Every DE they pluck off the streets leaves us a little safer. I don't think I could even recognize all the enemies I've made. But Carr knew them all. He just got a little overzealous."

"That's putting it mildly. Draco, he wanted to kill you! He probably still does."

"Well, all right. More than a little overzealous. But after A.W.L. is done fucking with his memory, I'd be surprised if he remembers his own name, let alone mine." Harry scowled at that, so he added, "Look, someday when you run for Minister for Magic, you can promise to clean up the corruption."

"I'm never going to run. Anyway, haven't you always said that every Minister for Magic we've had has been an imbecile?"

"Well, yes. But see, you'd be our imbecile."

That comment earned Draco a sharp nudge from Harry. "Git."

"Hey, take it easy. You're provoking a very rich man!"

Harry's own smile was hard to disguise even behind the glamour. "Congratulations, then. I've always wanted my very own sugar daddy."

"Play your cards right and you just might get a lovely reward." He threaded his fingers behind Harry's back and pulled him into an embrace.

"C'mon, Draco, we need to celebrate. Where would you like to go?"

Draco looked at Harry in mock seriousness. "One problem. Once again, it looks like we're about to be front-page news. Let's see if I can predict the headline this time – 'Spy Malfoy caught in torrid embrace with Diagon Alley tart.' Any second there'll be graphic photos to go with that."

Harry turned his head, noticing the curious few who Draco pointed out with a discreet nod.

"Oops."

"Yes, oops does seem to cover it. Let's head home and get you out of those clothes." He peered at Harry more closely. "That is a glamour, isn't it? You didn't Polyjuice?"

Harry laughed. "No, don't worry. All the bits I need to fuck you into the nearest mattress are still intact."

"Good. You're making me nervous like this."

"And Hermione's skirt is probably not the smartest thing to be wearing at this point," Harry added with a lascivious smile and another deliberate tug of skimpy material. "She's a lot shorter than me. I'm actually freezing my arse off here. How do women pull this off anyway?"

"Must be in the genes. Let's go."

Harry didn't resist giving the growing crowd of gawkers a broad wink before he Disapparated. Smiling with anticipation, Draco recklessly did the same before he followed.

~.~.~.~

[identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 03:19 am (UTC)(link)
Eeee!!!! I love it! It's so adorable! You know, you don't see Harry dressed up as a girl so often in post-Hogwarts fics...

I can see why it didn't fit the end of ATBT, but it's a great little outtake/deleted scene!

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:19 am (UTC)(link)
Your icon! Your icon!! I adore it!!!

I wasn't all that sorry to dump this ending after I rewrote most of the earlier scenes, but I thought I'd toss it out because I am a narcissistic ho I thought it might amuse.

Thanks so much, Emma, for the virtual chocolate! What a cute idea!

[identity profile] ura-hd.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 03:44 am (UTC)(link)
cute. love the story and the prequel!!!

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:19 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks. I meant to post it sooner but I plain forgot.
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[identity profile] meredyth-13.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 03:55 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you SO much for sharing. This is lovely virtually as a stand-alone piece, and brought so much back to me. *makes note to self to re-read ATBT and DSoT for the umpteenth time*

I love Draco all squirmy with a female Harry in his arms - just beautiful.

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:21 am (UTC)(link)
I think I wrote this back when crossdressing H/D was all the rage. It really doesn't suit DSOT, but it's a fun little scene anyway. Glad you liked it.

[identity profile] luci0logy.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 03:59 am (UTC)(link)
I knew one day there would be some benefit in being awake at 4am. What a pleasure it is to be able to step, even if briefly, into this world again. Harry's certainly got a great sense of humour & I think this pair could shake the Ministry up, which would be a good thing. Thanks for posting this.

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:22 am (UTC)(link)
There are darn few benefits at being awake at 4 AM. so I'm glad I could provide even a small one. Glad you liked it - and hope it held up in the light of day.

[identity profile] arsenicjade.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 05:04 am (UTC)(link)
hee! I'm glad you decided to let us in on this. What fun.

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:29 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! And did you see, your Touch and Go was nominated for an HP Oscar, but now the nominations are all missing as they organize the voting, I think. Hope you caught it before it went (temporarily) bye-bye.

[identity profile] arsenicjade.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 06:09 am (UTC)(link)
I totally didn't see that. Thanks for telling me. Wow. *blinks*

[identity profile] snottygrrl.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 06:31 am (UTC)(link)
v. v. fun. thanks for sharing the out take.

calling it an out take gives me this sudden image of a blooper reel for fanfic [*stares in horror at bunny and hopes it will go away*]

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:30 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! And your idea of a blooper reel is a great one. Hop to it!

[identity profile] elsie.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 08:14 am (UTC)(link)
Dammit. Now I'm going to have to go back and read all of ATBT and DSoT again all the way through.

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:31 am (UTC)(link)
Ouch! Sorry about that. Well, except I'm not, really. I wish you the best of luck wading thru it all.

[identity profile] elsie.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:33 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, it's no hardship. ;) I'm always looking for an excuse to reread things.

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:42 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, me too! I just reread a whole bunch of H/D stories this week. So fun.

[identity profile] waterbird.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 10:08 am (UTC)(link)
Very cute but, yes, very different in tone from the rest of DSOT. Thanks for sharing this; I always enjoy seeing how your stories evolve and how you make choices about what to include, change, etc.

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:33 am (UTC)(link)
What happened is that this was written fairly early on, and then the tone of the rest of the ending got a lot darker. Mostly I make changes when my betas tell me, "Hey - that really sucks, you know?" Hahahaha!

[identity profile] meri-oddities.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 12:05 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, that was very cute. Perhaps not in the tone of DSOT, but still, I liked it a lot and I can *see* it. But that's always the beauty of your writing. Thanks for sharing it with us!

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:35 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks. I definitely see why it needed to be dropped from DSOT itself, as the rest of the story changed around it. But it's kind of a fun, playful scene. I meant to post it separately, then I forgot about it.

[identity profile] waterlilith.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 12:45 pm (UTC)(link)
A deleted scene! *loves*

The story is so brilliant. What more could you possibly hope for? Special features, of course. A collector's edition with extended author's cut? ;)

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:37 am (UTC)(link)
I think this is the only stray scene I have from a published fic. Most of what gets changed along the way deserves never to see the light of day, but this one was kind of cute, I thought. I'd forgotten about it there on my hard drive.

[identity profile] tipgardner.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 03:20 pm (UTC)(link)
I love it. So cheeky, so vivid and with some real heat to it as well.

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:38 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks! It really was too playful to match the ending I went with, so I didn't whine when it was suggested I drop it. In fact, I think I might have dropped it anyway without being told. But it's a kinky little scene.

[identity profile] mayflo.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 04:04 pm (UTC)(link)
True I don't remember the exact plot but I do remeber the oever all tone :P So yeah, this definitely doesn't go with the rest of DSoT but it's awesome! *grins like a goon*

Loved it! Harry's so charming like that XD Eee! It's like behind the scenes extra on a DVD. Brilliant!

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:39 am (UTC)(link)
It is kind of like a DVD extra! I don't hve any more, though. I need to get back to writing, I know. I've been taking a bit of a break.

[identity profile] grey-hunter.livejournal.com 2006-02-12 08:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Damn, I know it's supposed to have been the end of something, but seriously! You just leave it off there? :D Now I really wish it was a trilogy. LOL

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-13 05:41 am (UTC)(link)
Well, remember, in the previous scene, they'd just got it on twice, so I thought: too much of a good thing. Have to fade to black once in a while. A little known fact about my writing is that I'm not all that great at the sex scenes anyway, so this got me off the hook.

[identity profile] nakedbee.livejournal.com 2006-02-15 06:47 am (UTC)(link)
Yay! Thanks for posting this. ATBT and DSOT were fantastic and it was exciting to be able to revisit that world, even in an outtake. Actually, while I'm at it I must confess that ATBT is perhaps my favorite fic ever (and now that I have a livejournal, I'm finally getting around to telling you). OK, now I have to go hide again. :)

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-18 04:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh don't hide! You can cheer me up with lovely praise like that when I go through writing slumps. Thank you so much.

[identity profile] ex-ella-bane358.livejournal.com 2006-02-17 10:38 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks for sharing this, Viki! It's adorable. :)

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-18 05:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks, Ella. Sometimes we just need some fluffy H/D after all the things we put our boys through.

[identity profile] mtnjoy.livejournal.com 2006-02-19 08:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, oh, oh oh oh! I just (really, just--10 minutes ago) finished reading DSoT, then clicked on your LJ link, and look! More! And yes, I see that you were well advised by your betas, because this doesn't fit the tone at all, but still! More!

*blissful sigh over the More*

*settles worshipfully at your feet*

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2006-02-19 11:39 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

I did this, kind of, with A Thousand Beautiful Things, too - HP and the Slytherin-Coloured Lamborgini was posted alone because it was so lighthearted. My betas are terrific! They keep me between the ditches.

[identity profile] stereosymbiosis.livejournal.com 2007-05-27 10:06 pm (UTC)(link)
I just finished everything in the ATBT universe and I just thought I'd stop by and tell you how fantastic your writing is. :D I really enjoyed reading it! These are definitely some of my top favorites. Thank you so much for writing these wonderful stories. ♥

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2007-05-27 10:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow! Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed yourself - I know I did when I wrote them. Thanks for stopping over here and letting me know.

[identity profile] cleo-jay.livejournal.com 2009-02-07 10:38 pm (UTC)(link)
I just wanted to comment & let you know that I have just read everything in your ATBT universe (after someone else searched for it on an H/D comm) and I am so glad as I had never come across the universe before & it was truly fantastic!! I really love the way you write, especially motivations and relationships - it really made it a wonderful ensemble piece, while keeping H/D as the focus, as all your characters were wonderfully fleshed out! And the ideas & concepts behind the fics were brilliant - well thought out, original & captivating - literally, as I've been reading non-stop since last night (I should probably sleep now, as I'm beginning to sound a bit wired - sorry)! Anyhoo, I fell quite in love with your Harry (& your Draco too, actually) and this universe, so I just wanted to stop & say a huge thank you for your excellent writing! THANK YOU! :D

[identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com 2009-02-08 01:02 am (UTC)(link)
Awww, you made my day! I've been feeling a little bit forgotten-old-skool lately, since I haven't written much H/D at all, so it was very nice to hear that you found and enjoyed my stories. Thanks for taking the time to let me know.