hooray! i'm here to review. i've only read through chapter 4, because this makes the fourth night in a row this week that i've been up far too late for my own good when i have work in the morning. the end of the sweet making up scene seemed like the right place to stop at 2:30 am.
first, i have to say that i'm SO glad it wasn't actually dumbledore who killed voldemort. that was the only problem i had with ATBT. (you're probably asking, why didn't you say that back when you read ATBT? well, because for one thing it's hard for me to give negative comments, especially about a story i love that much. it makes me feel mean. and for another thing, none of us really knows what JKR has up her sleeve for that final battle, so i hate criticising people's ideas of it.) anyway, i always thought that the polyjuiced!dumbledore solution to the prophecy was too easy, a cop-out. and i still don't believe that the kill is going to be as easy as harry just casting the killing curse, but i think it's the best way for fanfic authors to go about it. i'd rather you not try to figure out what JKR's catch is. stick with the simple story, not a gimmick.
i also loved how you did harry and draco's row. they were such guys about it, completely misunderstanding and second-guessing each other, assuming they know what the deal is instead of trying to understand each other's feelings the ways girls often do. i think that is something a lot of authors, especially female ones, trip up--we forget how clueless guys can be, and we write it the way it would happen if they were girls.
another thing i admire about your writing is how you handle serious, dramatic situations. you don't try to run away from the heavy stuff, but you don't get bogged down in melodrama either. you add just enough lightness to keep things at a real-life level of drama while still taking the serious stuff seriously. for example, when hermione gets stuck in the chair in redmund's waiting room and snape has to pull her up before she can get her shoulders straightened out for the meeting.
and then there is the plain old funny stuff. i laughed to the point of tears during the fashion show, especially when i remembered that snape was in the audience. and then there was daniel calling god "jack" (out loud!). and draco's utter freak-out when he had to act like a muggle in front of daniel.
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Date: 2005-05-12 06:46 am (UTC)first, i have to say that i'm SO glad it wasn't actually dumbledore who killed voldemort. that was the only problem i had with ATBT. (you're probably asking, why didn't you say that back when you read ATBT? well, because for one thing it's hard for me to give negative comments, especially about a story i love that much. it makes me feel mean. and for another thing, none of us really knows what JKR has up her sleeve for that final battle, so i hate criticising people's ideas of it.) anyway, i always thought that the polyjuiced!dumbledore solution to the prophecy was too easy, a cop-out. and i still don't believe that the kill is going to be as easy as harry just casting the killing curse, but i think it's the best way for fanfic authors to go about it. i'd rather you not try to figure out what JKR's catch is. stick with the simple story, not a gimmick.
i also loved how you did harry and draco's row. they were such guys about it, completely misunderstanding and second-guessing each other, assuming they know what the deal is instead of trying to understand each other's feelings the ways girls often do. i think that is something a lot of authors, especially female ones, trip up--we forget how clueless guys can be, and we write it the way it would happen if they were girls.
another thing i admire about your writing is how you handle serious, dramatic situations. you don't try to run away from the heavy stuff, but you don't get bogged down in melodrama either. you add just enough lightness to keep things at a real-life level of drama while still taking the serious stuff seriously. for example, when hermione gets stuck in the chair in redmund's waiting room and snape has to pull her up before she can get her shoulders straightened out for the meeting.
and then there is the plain old funny stuff. i laughed to the point of tears during the fashion show, especially when i remembered that snape was in the audience. and then there was daniel calling god "jack" (out loud!). and draco's utter freak-out when he had to act like a muggle in front of daniel.